r/Songwriters • u/Final_Strawberry9250 • 21h ago
Feedback (REVISED)Unpacking The Past First Time Lyricist Hoping to find Composer/Musician Feedback "Unpacking the I want to share a deeply personal lyric I've done quite a bit if work since last posting. I've done some trimming and reworking. It hits on emotional baggage, and a journey to letting go
[Acoustic guitar Piano Intro] [Soft Cinematic Strings]
[VERSE 1]
No matter where i go,
Everywhere I've run
There's still unpacking to be done
I can't escape these boxes
Some carefully, some mindlessly stored
Memories i need and some I won't
[CHORUS] [Full Band Intensity]
I'm sifting through my past
Walking a road hell-bound
Searching for answers
that may never be found
Will I find freedom at last?
Or will I always be
unpacking the past?
[Verse 2]
Some I've labeled regret,
those boxes are full of shame
Left wondering who to blame
Sorting through the wreckage
of lost hope and fresh starts
Now broken in pieces and parts
Her picture in the mess
she chased truth in that shot glas
[CHORUS]
I'm sifting through my past
Walking a road hell-bound
Searching for answers
that may never be found
Will I find freedom at last?
Or will I always be
unpacking the past?
[Verse 3]
Found some answers,
labeled lessons learned
And a story I never told,
of a heart that burned so cold
Are the answers ones I'm meant to find?
Have I just been blind?
[Bridge 2] [Emotional Vocal Peak]
Are the answers in the ties that bind?
And the doors they hide behind
Boxes no one will claim
Is that why I carry this pain?
[Chorus] [Full Band Intensity]
I'm sifting through my past
Walking a road hell-bound
Searching for answers
that may never be found
Will I find freedom at last?
Or will I always be
unpacking the past?
[Music Fades To Solo Acoustic Guitar]
[Outro]
I keep unpacking the past...
Can I find answers at last?
If I stop unpacking the past...
Will I find freedom at last?
{Intimate}
[Fade to a whisper]
The unpacking has been so slow...
Do I really need to know?
Maybe time to let it go.
Gonna let it go...