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Feedback (REVISED)Unpacking The Past First Time Lyricist Hoping to find Composer/Musician Feedback "Unpacking the I want to share a deeply personal lyric I've done quite a bit if work since last posting. I've done some trimming and reworking. It hits on emotional baggage, and a journey to letting go

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[Acoustic guitar Piano Intro] [Soft Cinematic Strings]

[VERSE 1]

No matter where i go,

Everywhere I've run

There's still unpacking to be done

I can't escape these boxes

Some carefully, some mindlessly stored

Memories i need and some I won't

[CHORUS] [Full Band Intensity]

I'm sifting through my past

Walking a road hell-bound

Searching for answers

that may never be found

Will I find freedom at last?

Or will I always be

unpacking the past?

[Verse 2]

Some I've labeled regret,

those boxes are full of shame

Left wondering who to blame

Sorting through the wreckage

of lost hope and fresh starts

Now broken in pieces and parts

Her picture in the mess

she chased truth in that shot glas

[CHORUS]

I'm sifting through my past

Walking a road hell-bound

Searching for answers

that may never be found

Will I find freedom at last?

Or will I always be

unpacking the past?

[Verse 3]

Found some answers,

labeled lessons learned

And a story I never told,

of a heart that burned so cold

Are the answers ones I'm meant to find?

Have I just been blind?

[Bridge 2] [Emotional Vocal Peak]

Are the answers in the ties that bind?

And the doors they hide behind

Boxes no one will claim

Is that why I carry this pain?

[Chorus] [Full Band Intensity]

I'm sifting through my past

Walking a road hell-bound

Searching for answers

that may never be found

Will I find freedom at last?

Or will I always be

unpacking the past?

[Music Fades To Solo Acoustic Guitar]

[Outro]

I keep unpacking the past...

Can I find answers at last?

If I stop unpacking the past...

Will I find freedom at last?

{Intimate}

[Fade to a whisper]

The unpacking has been so slow...

Do I really need to know?

Maybe time to let it go.

Gonna let it go...