Verse 1
You were there every day
A monument to kindness
You spoke of honesty
And I couldn't help but fall
The soft blue of your eyes
Matched the vision of my future
Never realizing
I was visiting the Dead Sea

Chorus
Salt of the earth no more
A sting on my tired eyes
Weeping oceans scream out
No beacon to light the way
Burned one too many times
And now I'm left to swim alone

Verse 2
Your hopes became my dreams
A joy I thought we shared
Curing in your love
You brought out my best
But my heart slowly shrank
Drying out but preserved
Until the water evaporated
My tears, my only companion

Chorus
Salt of the earth no more
A sting on my tired eyes
Weeping oceans scream out
No beacon to light the way
Burned one too many times
And now I'm left to swim alone

Bridge
I welcomed your burn, your love
Soaking in the brine of your making
Never once did I think I was drying out
The chalky residue proving otherwise
Blind to the signs written in white

Chorus
Salt of the earth no more
A sting on my tired eyes
Weeping oceans scream out
No beacon to light the way
Burned one too many times
And now I'm left to swim alone

Outro
Salt of the earth no more
Left to swim alone
Salt of the earth no more

Pretty basic song, hope yall like it! I wrote this a couple months ago, pretty mild I’d say. Any feedback would be appreciated! If you would like to listen to it the song will be posted in the comments :)

[verse]
I can feel the air
Filling my chest
It’s like something is there
Im not so depressed

[verse]
What’s left of my heart is beating
Surging my brain activity
I’m losing this empty feeling
Freeing me from captivity

[pre chorus]
In my head im seeing the evidence
Of dancing with acceptance

[chorus]
In the midst of the chaos I found a way
To rest and close my eyes
Was more like a hibernation or a daze
Than it was my demise
Can’t say my heart stopped beating
As all my thoughts kept repeating
Circumstance pried and tried
But I’m the reason I stayed alive

[verse]
They tried to take me up
And all I had to do was wake up
Then find my reason to care
Stubborn to go up there

[pre chorus]
In my head im seeing the evidence
Of dancing with acceptance

[chorus]
In the midst of the chaos I found a way
To rest and close my eyes
Was more like a hibernation or a daze
Than it was a demise
Can’t say my heart stopped beating
As all my thoughts kept repeating
Circumstance pried and tried
But I’m the reason I stayed alive

[bridge]
I was offered tiny glances
Into your second chances
But in the possibility
I’d be forgetting me
So I laid barely dead
In my coffin bed
Autonomic repair for my second chance
In myself practiced in good riddance

[verse]
This is my revival to save myself
I guess I don’t need anyone else
I’m finding the answer to set me free
And the answer is me

[pre chorus]
In my head im seeing the evidence
Of dancing with acceptance

[chorus]
In the midst of the chaos I found a way
To rest and close my eyes
Was more like a hibernation or a daze
Than it was a demise
Can’t say my heart stopped beating
As all my thoughts kept repeating
Circumstance pried and tried
But I’m the reason I stayed alive

[outro]
I’m the reason I stayed alive
I want to see the more in life
So I’ll wait patiently
For something better to happen to me
I’m the reason I stayed alive
I want to see the more in life
So I’ll wait patiently
For something better to happen to me

Another "I have no idea what genre this is" track.

--Verse 1 (3/4)--
Thy guiding light
Reflect from the sky
Heavenly sight
That bids eagles fly
Stripped of all need
'cept reasons to bleed
I revel in c-beams
Now hope has been freed

--Alt Verse 1 (4/4)--
Goddess you break me
You always forsake me
That's how you tear walls down
To finally wake me
Ye venomous viper
Old raven-eyed sniper
That's how you reprove me
For paying the piper
You... broke me down

--Verse 2 (3/4)--
Come to the bow
Down by the fore
Stern showed us how
Through sweet tales of yore
Reach o'er the edge
Dip 'neath veneer
A promise to mermaids
That Davey can't hear

--Alt Verse 2 (4/4)--
Goddess you hurt me
Seduction pervert me
For deigning to yield when you
Tried to convert me
The ship's going under
I sunk it with plunder
But even while drowning
Can yet hear the thunder
You... hurt me still

--Bridge (3/4)--
Dear, it's in your way
Perennial nature for you
Even in silver foil doomsday
Copper keeps fading to blue
Coming to terms with the
Danger, arresting of
Knowing you, just as you are
Crashing against the tide
No longer apt to hide
I must walk into your arms
(silence)
And strike

--Choruses / Solos (4/4)--
Whoah, whoah, aaaaa!
Whoah, whoah, aaaaa!
Waltz into shade
Sparks through the night
Whips wrap with blade
Fraught vicious fight
I'm not trying to convince you
That how you do things is wrong
Just screaming to show it true
I'm sick of playing along
Whoah, whoah, aaaaa!
Whoah, whoah, aaaaa!

Brisk, trading blows
Thrown 'gainst the wall
Victor, who knows?
Living this brawl
You stare me down with blood-moon eyes
I juxtapose with joy
As half a pound of flesh for sale
Your lips smack for that ploy
Whoah, whoah, aaaaa!
Whoah, whoah, aaaaa!

Frantic on stage
Splendor of fire
War for the age
Foe I admire
Ignite the bravest passion here
Entwined within our storm
So finally I'll have your ear
The action shifts in form
Whoah, whoah, aaaaa!
Whoah, whoah, aaaaa!

--Outro (3/4)--
Perigee in tempest's core
Intimate syzygy's law
Blessed quell, a lowering of arms
And beaming, show me what for

Brightest Smile

Yesterday felt like a dream to me

Saw you again after so many years

Even after all this time apart

You still had the brightest smile I’ve ever seen

You looked at me with those dazzling eyes

And for a moment the world stood still

I looked away, suddenly shy

Still wondering how you keep that light

I still find myself lost in your memory

Trying to understand what I should feel

Was it right to walk away back then

Or is this wound something time can’t heal

Still wondering how you have those eyes

Still wondering how your smile survives

In a world that changed us both inside

You still shine like nothing died

I’m quietly standing far behind

Pretending I’m doing just fine

But I can’t deny what I feel inside

Still caught in your light

I keep telling myself I’ve moved on

That I’m healing from those darker clouds

But seeing you brought it all back again

Every memory rushing out

I don’t want you to lose that smile

Even if I’m no longer in your life

So I keep my distance, stay out of sight

Hiding everything I feel inside

Still wondering if I made the wrong choice

Back when I let you go that way

Now I just watch from far away

And leave the past where it stays

Still wondering how you have those eyes

Still wondering how your smile survives

In a world that changed us both inside

You still shine like nothing died

I’m quietly standing far behind

Pretending I’m doing just fine

But I can’t deny what I feel inside

Still caught in your light

Maybe some stories aren’t meant to return

Some feelings are meant to quietly burn

I don’t reach out, I don’t rewind

I just keep you in the back of my mind

Still wondering how you have those eyes

Still wondering how your smile survives

Even if I never get it right

You stay like light in my mind

I’ll stay quietly far behind

Letting you live your own life

But somewhere deep I can’t deny

You’re still my brightest light

Yesterday felt like a dream to me

And maybe that’s where you’ll always be

................................................................

This is an old song I wrote (I think it was my second song). I recently polished the lyrics and I’m not sure if the changes improved it, so I’d really appreciate honest feedback.

I’d love to know what you think about the lyrics, emotions, and storytelling.

https://suno.com/s/HyarfOHyieQzAoav

Lyrics:

A black shadow

With thick edges

Lingering in my peripheral vision

Flickering, then disappearing

It is there

I can see it

I can feel it

Shaped by tricks of light

It is not another version of myself

Golden edges glowing like quantum geometry

An invisible curtain drapes over everything

With time-segmented strings in space

Creating an illusion of meaning

Yet it remains inaccessible

We live in a world of constant interpretation

Forever trying to give you something you can understand

Depression awareness campaigns

Tell us about a huge invisible black dog

That only you can see

Others cannot

That dog follows you during the day

And during the night

Who would choose to live with a dog like that?

But we still have to live with it

Every mystery earns another label

Bipolar disorder can be overwhelming

One phase is high

One phase is low

Your life is like a roller coaster

Yet impulsive buying

grandiose thoughts

Can feel exhilarating

In a materialistic world

While swinging between extremes

None of those were why I saw the shadows

Something I gave up telling people about

I stay silent

The pain needs no sharing

The shadows are in the rift

Of time

Of being

Of surviving

The shadows are in the rift

Of time

Of being

Of surviving

Nobody understands

Nobody dares to speak of it

Yet it exists

Yet it stays with you

I've been unboxing my old boxes of notebooks and found this one:

"Unboxing identity"

Verse 1

Once upon a life, there came a generation,

Breaking every box in a quiet celebration.

No fixed style. no label, no design,

just a soul that whispered, “I am undefined”.

They were told to simply, “Just be me,”

A world where every heart could wonder free.

But words were torn away one by one,

'Til silence was the only song.

Pre-Chorus

We chased the light, we crossed the line,

Lost the map while seeking “mine”.

Chorus

Once upon a life, where did freedom go?

We built new walls from the seed we sow.

Sixteen names, a thousand more,

Still we’re standing outside the door.

Too much weight to carry inside,

now building boxes just to hide.

Tell me now before we say goodbye –

Where did freedom learn to die?

Verse 2

Once upon a life there was a void,

Searching for the words we all destroyed.

Children drawing borders in their minds,

Wondering why no comfort they can find.

No more time to fit inside,

Too much weight to choose a side.

Brick by brick we shape our fate,

Building prisons we create.

Bridge

Minne jäi se vapaus?

(Eng. Where did freedom go?)

Lost beneath the endless noise.

Sanat katosivat, jäi vain hiljaisuus.

(Eng. The words disappeared, leaving only silence.)

And nobody remembers the choice.

Final chorus

We needed words, we needed names,

Not endless wars of different frames.

A box shelters, helps us find our way,

But not decide where we must stay.

Build your boxes if you choose,

Leave a door, no soul can lose.

Freedom lives where hearts can see:

You’re more than every identity.

Once upon a life we learned to see:

Not trapped in boxes, finally free.

Leave your door open.

If anyone can help me name the two sections before the last Verse because I have no idea if they'd be a Verse, Chorus etc.

[Verse]

one moment you were here next moment you were

gone stay here don't go away, he's walking around

bitting his tongue, clenching his fists because dad

was pished the day you left, maybe its for the best

maybe we should just move on fighting the tears as

you left home.

[Chorus?]

Come back, come back and stay with us for one

more night, don't wanna sleep, don't wanna go to

bed knowing that your truly gone, stay with me, stay

with me, don't leave me alone in this lonely world,

come back to me, come back to me and cuddle me

one more time.

[Verse?]

All the goodbyes can never make up all the times

that I said hi, but it broke my heart seeing you suffer

that whole time, seeing you in pain every single day

for the last days of your life.

[Bridge/Pre-chorus]

So there's no need to suffer, no more tears from you

or us, let's think of the good times, the happy days

[Chorus]

Come back, come back and live with us for one more

night, don't wanna sleep, don't wanna go to bed

knowing that your truly gone, stay with me, stay with

me, don't leave me alone in this lonely world, come

back to me, come back to me and cuddle me one

more time.

[????]

So please don't leave me alone, please don't go away

from home, but if you do know that I will think of you

every single day of my life.

[????]

I love you, I love you and it's for the best for you to go

to sleep but I just don't want you to leave, why can't

you stay, why does this world have to be so fucking

cruel.

[Verse]

one moment you were here next moment you were

gone stay here don't go away, he's walking around

bitting his tongue, clenching his fists because dad

was pished the day you left, maybe its for the best

maybe we should just move on fighting the tears as

you left home.

I wrote this one about a wizard that conjures up a spirit. Let me know what you honestly think of these original lyrics. I'm very proud of this one. The wizard and the skull. Lets discuss.

Verse 1

The moon is at its brightest

Above the autumn breeze

The crickets sing in the distance

Like the crashing waves of the seas

The incense is burning

Its fragrance fills the room

The hour of bewitching

The smell of her perfume

chorus

I kneel before my altar

And slowly chant the words

You hear me call upon your soul

And we fly away like birds

We fly into the astral plane

Nothing here's the same

Look into my eyes

Tell me what's there

A beautiful maiden

With long auburn hair

Verse 2

A shadow passes by me

The cold chill fills the room

The sky has fallen gray

And the clouds have changed to gloom

The candles have been lit

They flicker against the wall

The veil has come down

Like the autumn leaves that fall

Chorus

I kneel before my altar

And slowly chant the words

You hear me call upon your soul

And we fly away like birds

We fly into the astral plane

Nothing here's the same

Look into my eyes

Tell me what's there

A beautiful maiden

With long auburn hair

Blinded but I want it 

Finish line envisioning it 

Pine box dreams

Signs and figures tired trying to figure out what it means 

Spirit by door thought it was Mara my hands extending hella wide 

More apparent I'm dead inside 

Stench coworkers took notice 

If I die bury me in a lotus 

Infinity take care of my consciousness 

Already spoke my peace to Jesus 

Uncle Joe and Tanesha maybe it's time 

Don't worry Mama I'll be fine 

Couldn't keep Mara waiting too long 

No longer will be alone

Charles I'm ready 

Can't wait to see you Moonie 

Purpose already served 

Bones forever engraved in earth 

Left memories on Facebook that will last 

Family won't have to visit that grass 

Tik tok videos in case for visuals 

Old one they can see I was once spiritual 

Mark I made it 

Shell Gaia release me for it 

Coming back as a butterfly I'll visit 

In tushita with Maitreya taking visits 

Pure lands already booked it 

Infinite tickets 

So many realms 

With Gautama at the helm 

Anticipating 

Tired of waiting 

St. Peter knows already 

Preparing for eternity 

Taking so much acid that,

Mind's become an attic

Tongue's itchy, and when I smoke

I see erratic

Flow states a lie, either you float or die

no matter how high you are

It's about the time

I kick a slicker rhyme

Spit a dime more finer than them bitches you see in a car crying

And when you 'proach 'em,

you be clapping all night

and next day you be all roaches and fly

Come arise ya mind,

like Dali Lama in a flight

And get the image that you was in a vie

Get it right or fight yourself in your mind,

But keep this in yo' mind too, the fight'll end in a tie

Lie down, get some air and think about life

Not much to think about

Well, you've got eyes, check around

find stuff to write, 'n then criticise like karens in they periods, aight

Dignify the line below, where they

snort 'n confine, or get yo' stick broken like Saruman the White

Well he was, once upon a time

Now he's kicked by the little guys too

Half his size

What's a small fry?

Go fly a kite

Or set a watchman to look after yo' wife

But its okay, you can always cope,

Even if there's no scope, you just need some cod - eine and baloney

In a lonely place, its not holy

Don't be a dope fiend though, it can be addictive

Makes you feel like you're on some sick shit

But you're not, you're just biscuit

Dipped in acidic sipped tea

He's an ill - fitted and dim - witted

numb nuts

Mind splitted like Dmx and Damiun

Barely stunted like Twice, Academia

But he's never limited unlike us,

The regular peepers

His thoughts flit like uh,

dyslexia

And he's steel erected like

Tryin' to find a measure

Feelin' a little viscious,

pretentious

He's ridiculous like Ferb n' Phineas

linear to bearin' fear with rever-

ence, and still care bout frens

that turn their backs in the end

It's just an appearence,

the realness isn't real,

deep down, he's much more complex

He's like spidey against the phoenix

He can flip bondings like

bleachin' a reek n'

Make it look eligible, just a normal

ripple on the stream

It's not ripple, but rippable

Soil in front of a reaper

The way he is, it's just a regulator

To fool us into our misdemeanor

Sets the stricture and we fool enough not to picture,

the caricature, seemingly a zebra

An appleasing diction, an appleseed

But its poisioned, the way you deem

it,

the rapture, the way you found it, or maybe not, if they forced you to drown in

it, turn around, he is grinnin' loud

no doubt, he has taken over

and made you vow

every pigeon of the invincible, he got assasin - ated

And yes, I'm talkin' bout religion

Cig gets pricey, what is it?

cinnamon wrapped in gold?

But no worries, stack gets more n' more fatter n' cold

Fatter than the fat guy bound with sharp ropes

7 guys pullin' they hands away seein' no hope

Who is this? A genius or a retard

Talkin' of Om-

ens, brains' like desert dunes,

Oases and wet cement

See men, mind's shaped by the wind

But never let it blow away

What's desert without its dunes

The grains of samd like braincells,

The oasis is the imagery

and the writing.... wet cememt

Stay connect - ed

The alchemist is on his way

to turn lead into gold

But don't be misled, like a mistletoe

I'm finna coat

All this bullshitlike a batter of loath-

in, like a win-win

Any one who disagrees see this

leach suckin like he finna preach

im finna scream, finnalisima dream

cleanse your soul child, it too much to teach

Who am I say stuff like these

Just a fiend schemin' in skinny jeans....

Haha...