Hi! Could you please check the lullaby I wrote?

Zaldrīzesse ēdrusi.
Bantis zōbrie issa.
Qēlossi albie issi.
Se ñāqes tolmiot issa.

Dōna ēdruryssi
Ñuhor raqnon
Jaehosi ao amīsagi
Sīrgo ao kiragon.

Ñuhyz rūs sir ēdrus
Hae zaldrīzesse ēdrusi.
Drūr kostā sōvegon
Iemnȳ kasta rōvor jēdar.

I've been learning high valyrian for only a little while, but I feel as though having a practice buddy could help a lot, i am only a beginner so if anyone is starting as well we could be of help to one another and if my buddy is already more knowledgeable I could learn a lot. ☺️