r/Scribes • u/maxindigo • 1d ago
For Critique FRAGILE WATER
Here's a thing. I did this a couple of weeks ago, posted it on IG, and it received a very positive response. I was very unsure of it, and I remain unconvinced by my own work.
It's a quote from a lovely Nancy Kerr song, Fragile Water - it's a song which uses the ancient Orkneyan legend of silkies - creatures who lived as seals in the water but shed a skin to walk as humans on land - as a metaphor for the very modern issue of gender fluidity.
I wanted to break the usual linear presentation of lyric, and allow a transition from black on white to white on darker shades. I also felt that echoing the age-old nature of the legend with insular half uncial was appropriate.
The brush strokes were a shape I hade very much in my head, like falling ribbons. Looking at it now, I wish they were bolder and broader.
It was done with gouache and watercolour, on Sauders Waterford Cold Pressed. Brause nibs, folded pen for some of the swooshes, brush for the others.
I'm interested in what people think. It's a different sort of composition to me, and I might return to the song, and the form at some point. I'd be as inclined to refine technique and execution as much as anything else.
Feel free to dig in.